Saulat (Saudi Arabia ) got an overall 7.5 band in IELTS

 

Saulat

(Saudi Arabia)

Got 7.5 overall band in IELTS 

Letter

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to share my comments on the day long event that I prearranged for my organization, in your hotel lately.

First of all, I would like to praise you for the great hospitality that hotel management and its staff provided during the event. I would also like to commend on the overall ambiance, which all my colleagues admired as well, especially the elegant Dolphin Fountain at the entrance was giving an aesthetic touch and uplifted the main view of the hotel. Moreover, the table arrangement along with the name tagging reservation was also spot on.

On the contrary, we encountered an awful experience at the lunchtime, where the food was delayed for half an hour. Later, most of the guests complained that main course of the meal was served cold and some also complained about the stale salad. Regrettably, a few of the members enjoyed the cuisines, which could be observed from the left over foodstuff.

I believe that it could only be a coincidence what we faced at that moment, as the entire hotel team that we encountered were seasoned professionals. However, for the improvement, I recommend you to take up the mentioned shortcomings with the head chef, and especially the kitchen team should be realigned and trained to provide the guests with the best overall hotel experience.

I hope that my above feedback will be look upon cautiously and expecting to have improved services ahead.

Yours faithfully

band: 7.0

Mistakes that prevented this letter from reaching a band 8 

some grammar mistakes

singular plural mistakes 

In some places, articles are missing, and sometimes they are used when not necessary 

Essay

More working class are not getting enough time for workout during weekdays or in their leisure time, which is resulting in health issues. I believe, imbalanced eating habit and infinite struggle to earn money are the key factors due to which people wither away from keeping themselves fit.

Imbalanced eating habit is on the prime reasons which is gradually hurting people and negatively impacting on their well-being. Eating practices have deteriorated nowadays, as during lunchtime at work, fast food is preferred meal of most of working society. For example, my cousin is in his mid 30s. He is employed by an audit firm and since his work is demanding, he hardly finds time for himself. So whenever he feels like, he grabs a burger from nearby shop or switch restaurant for a change. Due to this, he has gained excessive weight in just a matter of few months, and now its getting harder for him to attend to gym as he gets tired very quickly.

Another prime issue is the struggle to earn more and more, in which firms are offering attractive packages and overtime options. Employees end up spending most of the time at workplace rather than having quality life with family. This is driving the entire working race to a physical and mental dilemma. Most of the people are exhausted when they reach home late. Another issue what is mostly seen recently is that after pandemic, even after office hours, people also work from home till late. This is leading to unhappy family and social life with least time for exercise and keeping fit. Therefore, it is further increasing their stress, blood pressure and sugar level and overall drastically affecting health.

In order to attend this issue wisely, we need to have a paradigm shift. In my opinion, One must keep balance between professional and personal life because health is wealth. Fitness and wellbeing must not be compromised over unhealthy diet and some extra cash. Furthermore, health measure standards needs to be set in life and must adhere to it religiously. It will automatically be easy to spend time and effort for fitness clubs and to have leisure activities for all family.

band: 7.0

Mistakes that prevented this essay from reaching a band 8 

all red color words are mistakes 

Some grammar errors

missing articles

singular/plural mistakes

some referencing words are mistaken 

mistakes in articles (sometimes faulty and sometimes not used)

Saulat says

Preparing online for my IELTS with Seema Academy has been a great experience for me.

Ms. Seema is a highly qualified and expert IELTS teacher. The techniques I learned during my online preparation have polished my English skills and helped me to achieve the required band.

Secondly, considering my full-time job, Ms. Seema was very kind and generous in organizing flexible classes to cope with my desired timings which made it extremely easy for me to practice. 

I highly recommend Seema IELTS Academy as the first choice for IELTS preparation.